Much better, although the tail is a little heavy.
For the tinsel, are you tying in at the eye and wrapping down to the tail and back to the eye, or is it just one layer?
For the bucktail:
When tying in/on the white, pinch it hard against the hook shank so it does not fold around the sides.
When tying in the black and then the brown, first make a wrap around the black ONLY to bundle it and then tighten the thread as you bring the bundle down to the hook. Cover with two or three more wraps and cement the butts lightly. Repeat the bundle procedure for the brown bucktail. This will keep each bundle separate and on top of each other. Cement the butts once before wrapping a tidy head - cement the head.